tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post4736555534568199532..comments2013-08-17T15:49:11.647-07:00Comments on The Characters in Marsha's Head: A New NovelMarsha Wardhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15389060049107102815noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post-90107135960899842852009-09-05T20:28:20.442-07:002009-09-05T20:28:20.442-07:00Wow! Thanks, ladies. I've got the first chapte...Wow! Thanks, ladies. I've got the first chapter written and I'm one scene into the second. I had an awesome brainstorming session last night with another writer, and BAM, all the ideas have fallen into place. Now I can get this from first draft to finished manuscript by the end of December. That's the plan, anyway. Wish me luck!!!Marsha Wardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15389060049107102815noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post-4065100614510609052009-09-05T00:03:12.421-07:002009-09-05T00:03:12.421-07:00Oops, I wasn't suppose to be anonymous. Sorry,...Oops, I wasn't suppose to be anonymous. Sorry, Marsha.<br /><br />Debbie Weikel :)Deborah Weikelnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post-28906938522358406582009-09-04T23:58:03.885-07:002009-09-04T23:58:03.885-07:00I think you did a great job writing at writing a f...I think you did a great job writing at writing a first draft. I like how it starts with a wedding and then BAM you're right into action with the groom bleeding. It peeks my interest enough to want to keep reading. I've been told many times to start out with action to grab the reader and you really did it. I also like the slang. It's not hard for me to understand it and it gives me more insight to who the character is right away. Good job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post-65664029857478402882009-09-03T13:47:01.968-07:002009-09-03T13:47:01.968-07:00Good hook! It piqued my interest!
HeidiGood hook! It piqued my interest!<br />HeidiHeidiwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02593338979995203659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post-71027174204043285192009-09-03T08:09:33.627-07:002009-09-03T08:09:33.627-07:00I love the way you use the terminology, like "...I love the way you use the terminology, like "Lawsy" and "Hugging on her." You've got the touch, and yes, you do raise questions that just make people want to keep on reading!Shirley Bahlmannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15613281300605173576noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post-83008969484570016062009-09-02T20:13:31.549-07:002009-09-02T20:13:31.549-07:00Oooh, I like that last paragraph!Oooh, I like that last paragraph!Nikki~Down syndrome Storytellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10146299220600752628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post-27156722829422446842009-09-02T20:11:10.425-07:002009-09-02T20:11:10.425-07:00You are just going to have to write this faster Ma...You are just going to have to write this faster Marsha. I am not where I can get to your books but will be buying online soon. Just to pump me up I read a book by Cottonwood Smith in which the cowboys kiss the horses and are polite to the ladies. So I've got to get copies of yours soon! I have no doubt I will love them.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post-17970197955459296372009-09-02T18:04:57.671-07:002009-09-02T18:04:57.671-07:00Linda, I knew I should have gone one paragraph fur...Linda, I knew I should have gone one paragraph further:<br /><br />"What?" Marie protested, but Ellen had slipped away, motioning to Rulon and Clay to pick up the chair to bear Carl away. A crimson stain spread across the hip of Carl's trousers, and a shiver of fear coursed down Marie's spine. Carl hadn't yet recovered from the wounds he'd suffered in the shootout with kidnappers at a cave on the mountainside. Was he going to bleed to death because he got out of bed to marry Ellen?<br /><br />You're right, Nikki. I mention Ellen three times in that first paragraph, LOL! The "fight" is from my first book. Thanks for the kudos and the comments.Marsha Wardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15389060049107102815noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post-34062891206724721772009-09-02T17:06:51.234-07:002009-09-02T17:06:51.234-07:00Having questions about what is going on is good. I...Having questions about what is going on is good. It draws the reader in. The first paragraph seems a little weak, though. I tried to re-work it, but I don't know enough about the characters! Maybe start the story a hair earlier to allude to the fight(?) immediately? ...Marie hugged her brother a little one-sided to avoid the blood on his arm...something like that anyway. Don't you just love organic writing? I do. Great job, by the way!Nikki~Down syndrome Storytellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10146299220600752628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5710678999111323280.post-26182558108328654352009-09-02T16:39:02.217-07:002009-09-02T16:39:02.217-07:00Hmmm...lots of questions.Like, why is Carl bleedin...Hmmm...lots of questions.Like, why is Carl bleeding, and why doesn't anyone seem concerned? Was there a fight?Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17973021457618319866noreply@blogger.com